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    A life without love is a life not worth living
    Iíve come to see this over the years.
    At first towards my life I was forgiving
    But by now Iíve shed too many tears.

    I feel so pillaged inside
    Look what Iíve become.
    Some things just canít be denied,
    Without the warmth of your love, my body is numb.

    I pray for you to rescue me,
    But I think Iím beyond being saved.
    I feel so restricted that I canít be free,
    Iím simply a bird eternally caged.

    ~RIP Proof~
    They say the good die young...


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  • #2
    Pretty poem. But it's too simple, and there were no lines that stuck out as really good. This poem has been done a million times.
    no dough ho, you can't fuck with me!

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    • #3
      The image of a bird eternally caged is powerful......

      Like Aero stated tho, complexity and more depth is very needed in your poem...

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      • #4
        ye its good but its been dom too many times try and do something new. keep at it
        OH HAI!

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