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    if there ever was a time to write a rhyme
    then this is the time,
    cause every line that comes outta my mind
    will be better than ever,
    and i can guarentee it this time
    maybe it's a sign from god,
    tellin' me that this time I've reached my prime
    so let me take a breather,
    and jot down a few of my wonderul lines


    what is success?, success is what
    relieves the stress that you possessed
    from tryin' to conquer one of your goals,
    but ended up acheiven' the rest,
    maybe it's a test, to test your abilties of stress
    if you can conquer a goal,
    when you weren't even tryin' your best?
    sorry, had to get that question off my chest,

    now what is respect? respect is what you expect
    after given' it to someone you like or neglect,
    but it's a certain type of respect,
    it's the respect like a "What is up?",
    somethin' that is way different beyond an original set
    maybe it's a bet? to where as your life is a bet
    on your rep or the respect you give,
    and you hope for the best?
    sorry, had to get that wonderin' off of my chest,

    ok so what is love? love is somethin',
    that you wish could happen' from a sign up above
    given' you the trust in a woman,
    that you've never even thought of, the type of love
    where you would slice your wrist, and count
    each drop of blood as a times 10 for your love
    let me give you a message for love,
    let's see, love is like a maze,
    once you're in it, it is hard to get out of....or is it?
    it's your choice not from up above,
    if you believe in love, then say it and become one of us,
    sorry, had to get that out my heart, it was pumpin' with love....
    Go Cubs! It's Their Season Baby!

  • #2
    I enjoyed this piece. The whole introspection and questioning of certain things was good. Especially liked the love one. The first part kind of annoyed me cause I was wondering how many times you were gonna say time lol.

    but good stuff Alex.

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    • #3
      good looks d-fait
      Go Cubs! It's Their Season Baby!

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      • #4
        uppin'
        Go Cubs! It's Their Season Baby!

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        • #5
          this was a interesting piece, i really enjoyed reading it, it was something different, and i liked that

          8/10, nice

          keep it up!

          PS
          can you leave feedback on my poem Time 2 Think?
          Originally posted by Realize
          evilspecialist has always been a god of poetry even before his join date of june 04

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          • #6
            thanks

            yeah i will

            uppin'
            Go Cubs! It's Their Season Baby!

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            • #7
              7/10

              which is good considering most battlers cant do poetry at all...
              Hell Yeah I'm South African...bring on the hate!

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              • #8
                well you haven't met this one
                Go Cubs! It's Their Season Baby!

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                • #9
                  I felt that u used the same words for rhyming...but maybe thats wat makes it good.....7/10

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