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    this is the last song i will dedicate to you, i am done

    i threw out the picture frames
    and memories that bear your name
    i can not relive them right now
    a storm blew through with steady winds
    and i cna not face it in the state im in
    but its makes me wonder
    my darling was it all a lie?
    you waited so long then saw me die
    this was your long kiss goodbye
    i am just so naive
    when you decieve and i believe
    "baby, i will love you forever"
    you expect me to move on
    well give me back those love songs
    give me back the time i spent
    writing all those lines i ment
    until you proved me wrong
    we're moving on, moving on
    the dark side of the clouds
    follows me from time to time
    and i should have seen it coming
    remember all those nights
    i held you tight and watched the light
    fade through your window
    how could i have been so
    yeah i was just so insecure
    im coming undone for you
    i told you that im moving on
    im moving on, moving on
    you proved me wrong, im moving on
    i knew that this would take a while
    until then ill laugh and fake a smile
    because youll never know
    how numb i am when left out here
    this place, it smells like death i fear
    but youll never know
    im moving on, moving on
    Last edited by unknown entity; 09-07-2005, 09:52 PM.
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    any feedback guys?
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    • #3
      it was good, i felt the emotion in it. nice
      tay

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      • #4
        I love your poetry. This one was not your best, but I liked it anyway. I like your repetition.
        no dough ho, you can't fuck with me!

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        • #5
          thanks, yeah this was more of an emotions piece maybe not my best material
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