I Use To Love Him

[Tay-Tay]

planted seeds in the middle of my soul,
your words grew it’s way to my heart.
Unconditional kisses whispered on my cheek.
Speaking on lost languages of
::::::::Lo\/e.........

Slowly unraveling layers of my past
each article Lies upon the floor.
Sentimental emotions
over flows

Drowning the materials the once
made us.
Drenched in lonely tears
washing away faded memories
with each swipe of my

hand
In.
Hand
you and I

side glancing
cornering you out
of my thoughts..

Keeping me in the distance of.

I use to love him

[Kali]

Awesome. Could use some editing... Some words didn't make sense, and it should be used, not use... I really liked it though.

[EvilSpecialist]

^I agree.

I understood a lot of it, but it needs a little bit of work. Some of the grammar was off, but I liked it. Keep up the good work.

[Tay-Tay]

well can you tell me what didn't make sense
to you...maybe i can help you make some sense of it...
and what grammer besides i use <--- instead of used

[Liona]

I like it

[Kali]

planted seeds in the middle of my soul,
your words grew their way to my heart.
Unconditional kisses whispered on my cheek.
Speaking in lost languages of
::::::::Lo\/e.........
Slowly unraveling layers of my past
each article Lies upon the floor.
Sentimental emotions
over flow[-s]
Drowning the materials that/which once
made us.
Drenched in lonely tears
washing away faded memories
with each swipe of my
hand
In.
Hand
you and I
side glancing
cornering you out
of my thoughts..
Keeping me in the distance of.
I used to love him

Those were the biggest things I noticed. Maybe there are more.

[Tay-Tay]

emm kay...thanx

[Maxfull Laceman]

the imagery could use a bit of improvement..and the piece lacks fluidity a tiney bit.


good read regardless.

peace!