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    "A Love Covered By Lies"

    A chapter of my life is now complete,
    It ended with many lies with a sprinkle of deceit.
    That bitch cheated on me without any regret,
    She said she wanted to marry me, but I’d never forget.
    All of the bullshit that she put me through,
    So much lies, made it too difficult to chew.
    Her downplaying them like they were minute,
    Her rude manners left me in an unforgiving mood.
    With the information that I gained and now know,
    I realized I can’t be with a dishonest hoe.

    I’m not ready to settle with a girl not on my level,
    I seem to fall upon those that are cursed by the devil.
    I am blinded by hope which is a deep problem of mine,
    I thought I knew the meaning of love, but it’s still left undefined.
    From the first day, I thought that I loved her until I realized our love was covered,
    I could see her expressions, her unhappiness, she was utterly flustered.
    I could only ask why, ‘why are you acting like you’ve done me wrong’,
    As she went on to explain herself, I realized our trust was finished, it was gone.

    Our bond was a fib ever since her and another locked lips,
    As she admits, I can see her swollen cheeks as a tear drips.
    But I’m not convinced, I could not look at her face ever since.
    She left me that evening crying and heaving,
    As I saw her leaving I witnessed that my new life was beginning.

    She will never get what she wants me to give,
    I will never forgive the backstabbing life that she lives,
    I will never look in her eyes and see hope again,
    I’m happy that my girlfriend and I have come to an end.


    *please comment*!
    Last edited by REPUBLICAN; 03-27-2006, 10:00 AM.
    You don't understand, I'm just the best that ever did it,
    When my physical form's gone, I'll spit it from the spirit.

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    You don't understand, I'm just the best that ever did it,
    When my physical form's gone, I'll spit it from the spirit.

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    • #3
      lol i dunno if it's your poems, i think it is, but everytime i read one it reminds me of a specific situation in my life that's a good thing though lol

      some terms are a little too informal, but otherwise it flows quite nicely.
      not too much emotion, but to the point.
      nice work.
      ... it's no surprise, that I got lost in your brown eyes ...

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      • #4
        thanks for the comment!
        You don't understand, I'm just the best that ever did it,
        When my physical form's gone, I'll spit it from the spirit.

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        • #5
          anyone else?
          You don't understand, I'm just the best that ever did it,
          When my physical form's gone, I'll spit it from the spirit.

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          • #6
            the last 4 lines i liked the most. it summed it up quite nicely.

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            • #7
              thanx!
              You don't understand, I'm just the best that ever did it,
              When my physical form's gone, I'll spit it from the spirit.

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              • #8
                Hah, at some points it reminded me of really old school poets for some odd reason. I don't even know why, perhaps it was the way you structured the rhymes. I didn't much like the first stanza, but it got better IMO as it went along.

                Nice work, keep at it man.

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                • #9
                  thank u man i will
                  You don't understand, I'm just the best that ever did it,
                  When my physical form's gone, I'll spit it from the spirit.

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                  • #10
                    i think its cute

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                    • #11
                      thank u!
                      You don't understand, I'm just the best that ever did it,
                      When my physical form's gone, I'll spit it from the spirit.

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                      • #12
                        Anytime Sweety!!!

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                        • #13
                          Fly on, Fly on, Fly on my friend
                          Go on and live again, Love again
                          You don't understand, I'm just the best that ever did it,
                          When my physical form's gone, I'll spit it from the spirit.

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