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    I snorted some thoughts so I could wonder-why
    I tipped the world over so I wouldn't stumble-lines
    I stole boxing gloves so I could fight-this-feeling
    I ripped up pages so I couldn't write-this-feeling
    I sharpended pencils so I could stab the paper strong
    I rolled a blunt of heart so I could smoke the beat to this song
    I spoke slowly so I could tip-off-a-grin
    I clipped my nails so I couldn't rip-off-your-skin
    I swallowed my spit so I wouldn't choke-on-my-tongue
    I gripped a pencil so I couldn't choke-you-or-lungs
    I 'cut' through people in line so I couldn't 'make-this-hurt'
    I stomped on my own heart so you couldn't break-it-first
    I held my tears so you wouldn't see me fold-back
    I died so I wouldn't feel pain when I asked what she had that I don't-have
    Love, live life, proceed, progress

  • #2
    I liked that..

    "I stomped on my own heart so you couldn't break-it-first"

    I especially liked that line alot.

    Good stuff.
    Now let the night be dark for all of me.
    Let the night be too dark for me to see
    Into the future. Let what will be, be.'

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    • #3
      "I stomped on my own heart so you couldn't break-it-first
      I held my tears so you wouldn't see me fold-back
      I died so I wouldn't feel pain when I asked what she had that I don't-have"

      favourite part, though it seems to go off a little towards the end. but that's my favourite part, i like it.

      great poem overall, good consistency the whole way through.

      ... it's no surprise, that I got lost in your brown eyes ...

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      • #4
        Hey Becky, this is a nice poem. I didn't know you also had a poetic touch lil sis.

        This is really another side of you I've never seen, usually you seem so sporadic and excited. This is a humble piece of work and very consistent as Gemma said.

        I bet I know who it's about to...

        I hope you doing alright kiddo, be good and stay safe. Excellent work.

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        • #5
          ^I really appreciate it. Yeah, I'm all different. . . a person comes with many emotions.

          And I think you're right on your assumption on who it's about.

          But I appreciate all of thise feedback, really.
          Love, live life, proceed, progress

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