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    It brings a tear to my eye just thinkin'-about-you
    Even with proper 'floaties,' my heart's 'sinkin'-withtout-you
    You're my better half, the one that keeps-me-going
    You're the one I hate, but my love keeps-on-showing
    You're my jacket in cold weather, a shoulder to cry-on
    You're the 'hand' that 'touches' my heart that I constantly pry-on
    You're my vocal punching bag, the one I can shout-to
    You're my ignorance, knowin' when I cry you don't know it's about-you
    You're my eyesight, that sees the good in all people
    You're my nice-guy, that never tries to be deceitful
    You're the paintings I draw, my beautiful pictures
    You're the pain that I endure when I see you with-her
    It brings a tear to my eye just thinkin'-about-you
    Even with proper 'floaties,' my heart's 'sinkin'-withtout-you

    I know I keep writing about this, but man. . . I feel really crappy.
    Love, live life, proceed, progress

  • #2
    that was cute....i like how you put it together.

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    • #3
      I really liked it. The way you compared this to that. The person it was meant for would know by some of the phrases that you were thinking of them when you wrote it.

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      • #4
        ^Indeed.

        Uppin'. .. thanks for feed!
        Love, live life, proceed, progress

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        • #5
          i really like it, the technique you used was wonderfull

          You're my jacket in cold weather, a shoulder to cry-on
          You're the 'hand' that 'touches' my heart that I constantly pry-on
          You're my vocal punching bag, the one I can shout-to
          You're my ignorance, knowin' when I cry you don't know it's about-you
          That bit sorta like hit me if ya know what i mean, i know what this feels like if its true.
          Good poem n a nice read
          OH HAI!

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          • #6
            ^Yes, it's very true, and I've felt this way for about two weeks now, whenever he got his girlfriend.
            Love, live life, proceed, progress

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