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    Take your rose and leave with more than your pride,
    I'm through with this relationship of a ride,
    The constant rewind replay of saying" maybe thing's will eventually work themselves out one day,
    The pain and the drama,
    Maybe it's karma comin' back on ya',
    Too many times spent comin' up short,
    Has left me here on a flip=side lonely with a broken ass heart,
    So I should've did this and maybe have said that,
    One's thing's for sure I can't let myself, ever go back,
    Back to the way things were,
    Now that I look back at it all, must have all been bullshit caused it all really a blur,
    Take your rose, leave me pride,
    Walk away from this cause I ain't the one to waste time and try,
    Thank God I've been able to grow from this heart felt emotion,
    Instead of chasing a deadly sweet poison.
    This was the first closing,
    But time has come to reopen a feeling,
    cause this soulfish needs healing,
    cause i'm finding myself lost even though I managed to leave a scrubs side,
    Buut I still find myself here with all kinds of worrires and fears,
    The one I feel could understand and accect it all ,
    is so far out of reach to even believe and have faith that one day he could be ever a simple phone call near,
    All I ever hear is please leave a message,
    a message could even sum it up right,
    Iwould end up sounding like all the others,
    the others that constantly day by day smother,
    I can only stay true to you all to myself,
    and maybe you and me can rule the world when there's nobody left
    Last edited by nemracSD; 06-14-2006, 06:46 PM.

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    very good man, true story?
    I could feel your emotion but not all the way through

    Too many times spent comin' up short,
    Has left me here on a flip=side lonely with a broken ass heart,
    So I should've did this and maybe have said that,
    One's thing's for sure I can't let myself, ever go back,
    That was my fave part
    OH HAI!

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    • #3
      I love poems about roses, i've written atleast four

      The emotion was there just not as strong as it could have been. You could have used more powerful words also. You're on the right track though.

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      • #4
        I added to it, comments plz

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        • #5
          Yo, this was prety cool. Liking how you describe the conflict.
          ..Breath Ez ..

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          • #6
            Deep stuff, I love rose poems as well lol... Keep it up!!

            Phenomenal woman, that's me.

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            • #7
              Gosh this is pretty fricking awesome...theres alot in it, easy to read and gripping. however it needs a little tidying up here and there to make it tyght if you know what i mean.

              i dig this :

              Thank God I've been able to grow from this heart felt emotion,
              Instead of chasing a deadly sweet poison.
              This was the first closing,
              But time has come to reopen a feeling,
              cause this soulfish needs healing,
              cause i'm finding myself lost even though I managed to leave a scrubs side,


              and a field day for psycholical analysis and debate, leaves me saying true true:

              a message could even sum it up right,
              Iwould end up sounding like all the others,
              the others that constantly day by day smother,
              Last edited by elemental; 06-15-2006, 04:31 PM.

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