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    she is dreaming again
    things that will never be
    because wishes are not horses
    and it isn't destiny

    and when she falls
    it goes so deep
    she recovers but
    lies in a heap

    the dreams start to awaken
    she's got nothing left to lose
    'cept the only thing she's wanted
    held in the grip of youth

    the power isn't hers now
    so out of her control
    she might just fall forever
    guess that's the way life goes

    dreams are just for children
    don't contain reality
    and if she's never happy
    then it wasn't meant to be


    -Kali
    Last edited by Kali; 01-29-2007, 05:33 AM.
    no dough ho, you can't fuck with me!

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    dreams are just for children
    don't contain reality
    and if she's never happy
    then it wasn't meant to be



    I liked that part the best. good piece.. its been a while since ive seen your stuff but this seems alot more abstract then what i remember. thats a good thing though, imo. very poetic.. i liked the structure.
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    • #3
      Thank you. I'm getting tired of writing my poems in thiss structure. I've bnene doing ita lot in poetry lately.
      no dough ho, you can't fuck with me!

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      • #4
        i cant say i've seen this structure from as of late. it does have atrace of Kali, i think it was the horses (which gave u away).

        yep yep great stuff, love the philosophy eg. "she recovers but
        lies in a heap"

        great 1st verse

        i like the 4th also and perfect follow on with what u've got in the 5th...wasnt meant to be....*sighs*

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        • #5
          Thanks. Lol @ horses.. I didn't realize I use horses as a metaphor so often.
          no dough ho, you can't fuck with me!

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          • #6
            uumm well u dont but have a few times

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            • #7
              Great work, Kali.
              Now let the night be dark for all of me.
              Let the night be too dark for me to see
              Into the future. Let what will be, be.'

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              • #8
                Nice.

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                • #9
                  Thanks.
                  no dough ho, you can't fuck with me!

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                  • #10
                    ehh I dunno, I've seen a few from you that I enjoyed more than this one. I mean it's not bad, but I didn't particularly enjoy it. Don't take my criticism the wrong way either, just trying to be honest. The one I didn't really like more than the rest was the second stanza...not entirely sure why. I did like those last 4 lines though. Nice poem
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                    • #11
                      Thanks. It isn't my favourite by myself either, lol.
                      no dough ho, you can't fuck with me!

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