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  • The Dream Of Reality -- A Poem (Duh!)

    dis my first poem posted on tha d12world board site....but my 4th altogether...lemme know what yall think

    "The Dream Of Reality" By N. Woodward



    I find myself in solitude, on my bed, gazing at the ceiling
    Evening arrives, along with dreams of hopes and goals
    But not tonight...
    I recollect from the day's events as I doze off,
    Ever so silently, into a sequence of its own...

    I suddenly drop to the ground and survey the surrounding
    Desolate, empty, horrid, and eerie are just a few words...
    But words that send a chill down my spine

    And I observe myself...
    Armor on body, sword in sheath, shield in fist
    Am I in a war? I cannot distinguish if this is real
    I quickly glance behind me to see my friends,
    Prepared to combat alongside me

    The enemy draws nearer and we commence a fight
    Adrenaline surges through my body, heart races
    I draw my sword and charge with a roar
    And every which way, I see a man...
    So I strike with my sword, with all the strength I have summoned
    The weapon contacts with every combatant...
    And I show so little remorse towards them

    Then, in a bang, a flash, bodies are everywhere, the war is over
    As the dust clears I look at my bloodstained sword,
    And I jam it into the ground, pleased with my actions
    I let out a final war cry as I notice the ground before me
    Bodies, as expected, but not of foes, but friends!

    My eyes start to fill with tears, the tears of disdain
    I slam my shield to the ground and drop to my knees
    How did I allow my anger to get the best of me?
    I try to regain my composure as I suddenly awake...
    I become startled by the events and I quickly sit up in bed
    Was this war only perceived by my dreams?
    Or was it agitated by the events of the day?
    I struggle to shrug it off as I go back to sleep
    And as I begin to doze off again, I look at the ground...
    And I see that bloodstained sword...
    Mafia Mascot

    Yeah.. I went there

  • #2
    post yalls comments, im up for criticism (constructive of course)
    Mafia Mascot

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    • #3
      Okay, brother, first of all I gotta say is...that's some good shit right there. Both on the surface and when you delve deeper into the inner meanings of your words. VERY nice plot twist. I like that.

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      • #4
        i lik it! :D
        ... it's no surprise, that I got lost in your brown eyes ...

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        • #5
          heeey thanks yall, means a lot -- i thought yall d12ers was gonna say suttin like "it dont rhyme, no pattern" or suttin, but thanks for ya feedback, uppin
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          • #6
            by tha way notorius, i read one of yo poems, tight work there too
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            • #7
              uppin fo ya feedback yall!
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              • #8
                DAMN! DATZ REAL GOOD
                o by da way, post more of ur shit

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                • #9
                  aiight still, i appreciate ya comment, ill post more soon, dont worry, but im workin on my audio right now so yeah im kinda busy (yup, i write poetry, freestyle, do audio, wrestle, and play hockey!) hahaha thanks still and all who commented -- we need to get this poetry forum mo kickin up!
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                  • #10
                    uppin for feedback, now yall have all 4 of my poems.....enjoy -- hopefully yall will see me on def poetry look out!

                    ~Hunter aka Da-SaVioR -- Illest Whyte Boi On Tha Mic
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                    • #11
                      I am becoming a real fan of your poetry. I read a couple of them now and you are trully gifted with writing. The best of luck to you in def poetry.
                      marketable,I am.. <------cLICK ME

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                      • #12
                        thanks everyone for postin wit yalls comments
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