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    My childhood memories are put away in an old dusty box.
    The most expensive thing you’ve bought me was a pair of socks.

    Calling me so many cruel names for all my life.
    You have even abused your ex-wife.

    Those few good times have been washed far away.
    Sometimes it felt like I slept in a bed of hay.

    Making me do all of your dirty housework.
    I had to pick up everything down to the last cork.

    You wouldn’t let me meet the boys next door.
    Your anger made me curl up on the floor.

    I hate all those threatening words you called me; it hurt so much.
    My love for you has dried up with only a beer bottle to clutch.

    All the alcohol and drugs you have used.
    I always ended up abused.

    At court you have and will always act like a pest.
    You would even refuse to take a small drug test.

    I know that gun you’ve held in the pocket of your vest.
    You always claimed that I ‘was the best’.

    Hoping you’ll give up some day soon.
    You made your own attorney look like a buffoon.

    I used to wish that you would come around.
    Whenever you saw me you always frowned.

    Why can’t you be the dad you were supposed to be?
    Just for once you should see me for me.

    I may not like to accept it; but you’re my father.
    Why can’t you just realize that I’m your daughter?
    Looking at my own reflection
    When suddenly it changes
    Violently it changes
    Oh no, There is no turning back now
    You've woken up the demon ... in me

    (helpsmili

  • #2
    poem

    your topic and thoughts are good, but you just need to work on your construction. The poem does not have goood rythem.

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    • #3
      it doesn't??
      Looking at my own reflection
      When suddenly it changes
      Violently it changes
      Oh no, There is no turning back now
      You've woken up the demon ... in me

      (helpsmili

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      • #4
        it does have good rhythm. every word does not have to rhyme exactly. in my opinion i think its really good.
        TruMonroe
        Actress,Poet,Dancer
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        • #5
          two poems I wrote with my friend

          Everytime when I try to stand up a lot of bricks fall on my back
          I'm trying to run away and leave my past
          my nerves are all on edge I find myself sitting on the ledge
          I'm at the end of my tether I always hoped things will get better
          My life is full of lies and broken dreams
          a never ending nightmare but no one hears my screams
          I can't look in someones eyes without knowing they lie
          It's not possible to have a nice life but at least i tried
          I sit in my room every night and think about suicide
          I've got nothin' to live for it is senseless
          I whipe a tear from my cheek I feel defenseless
          I'm about to run amok I don't wanna play this game
          I don't give a fuck cuz I know the consequences are the same
          I wanna break the misery off and call it quits
          I just wanna live a new life and leave all this shit
          I wanna scream out all the pain
          wanna grab a knife and hit a vain
          There's no opportunity cuz in the end I'll end up in hell
          I might become a murderer and end up in jail
          Everything I've done in my life was wrong
          cuz right now I feel like life can't go on
          i break down and start to cry
          while you all laugh and enjoy your lives
          I'm always alone with my problems to solve
          and there's no place to call home
          I'm a loser in life and missed my chance to blow
          I cut myself it pricks and bleeds
          but not as much as the pain inside me
          It's like your falling deeper and deeper
          but they can't hear your screams and no one can reach ya
          Shattered souls and broken dreams, my heart is filled with sorrow
          I don't really want to die but there is no tomorrow
          Life is its madness killed my heart and destroyed my soul
          I'm running away, falling apart into this dark hole
          cold emotion are exploring like dynamite
          sometimes I cry and not even know why
          I'm drowning in misery I can't feel alive
          but now I'm too weak to fight for my rights
          My eyes are filled with tears
          I wasted so many years and lived in fear
          I feel lonely my death nears
          I just wanna forget my past and run away
          ignore these rules and don't play this game
          but wherever I go there is no way
          whatever I do nothing will change
          I don't think there's a way to a livable life
          I'm watchin the world as it pass by
          a deadly silent emptiness
          overflows the days with bitterness
          my heart is drowning in this dirt
          all these lies make it hurt
          I've often imagined what it
          would be like if I would quit
          just grab the knife and a little cut would finish it



          Abyss of my life there are only empty words left
          I wanna scream all the pain out of my chest
          External voices won´t let me rest
          Nobody cares about me if i die
          No one would mourn, no one would cry
          Thats the reason i will finish my life
          It gives no way which takes me somewhere nice
          cuz there is nothing that keeps me alive
          I can't remember the nice days I had
          always i thought my life couldn´t be so bad
          but the only day i´ll be happy is my dying day
          I'm more and more dying, day by day
          I'm sitting here writing my suicide letter
          I always had the hope things will get better
          But there are no beautiful sides of life
          so I'm distressed and cry
          but I'll suffer this life till I draw my last breath
          I'm asking myself if there's a life after death
          it would be better than this, even if it was hell
          nobody knew what I felt, nobody saw when I fell
          my life is like a nightmare, like a bad dream
          but sometimes is silent the loudest scream
          " Sometimes I even cut myself to see how much it bleeds
          It's like adrenaline, the pain is such a sudden rush for me"


          I WILL DIE FOR EMINEM

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          • #6
            I'll_die_4_Slim...

            ...please change ur username...it's scarin tha fuck outta me

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            • #7
              why?

              I will die for him.... after the concert in June... I'll jump off a bridge... now you can think bout me whatever you want but it'll be true
              " Sometimes I even cut myself to see how much it bleeds
              It's like adrenaline, the pain is such a sudden rush for me"


              I WILL DIE FOR EMINEM

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              • #8
                he wouldn't die for u...

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                • #9
                  i know of course he wouldn't
                  " Sometimes I even cut myself to see how much it bleeds
                  It's like adrenaline, the pain is such a sudden rush for me"


                  I WILL DIE FOR EMINEM

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                  • #10
                    dude, please don't likk yourself...u probally have a lot to live for
                    Looking at my own reflection
                    When suddenly it changes
                    Violently it changes
                    Oh no, There is no turning back now
                    You've woken up the demon ... in me

                    (helpsmili

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                    • #11
                      no

                      Slim is the only thing I live for
                      " Sometimes I even cut myself to see how much it bleeds
                      It's like adrenaline, the pain is such a sudden rush for me"


                      I WILL DIE FOR EMINEM

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                      • #12
                        LMFAO...ko2...i think slim made da song "stan" for ppl like i'll_die_4_slim...anywayz...i forgot y im here

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                        • #13
                          I know what y'all think bout my name but it will be true
                          " Sometimes I even cut myself to see how much it bleeds
                          It's like adrenaline, the pain is such a sudden rush for me"


                          I WILL DIE FOR EMINEM

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                          • #14
                            i hate the internet. or maybe its just the people on the internet.






                            i think im going to go with i hate the people.

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                            • #15
                              oh and ive just read your poem...

                              i dont care if the poem wasnt spot-on or had perfect rhythm/rhyming words...the topic was real and the feelings were too...that was some deep shit and i can tell that this poem will mean a lot to you...it should do...i like it and i hope your stupid father sorts his fucking head out





                              keep ya head up girlie...i can tell you're strong

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