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    i wrote this thru out january of 2003 for my ex girlfriend megan. i was going thru some old things of ours tonight and found this poem. i wrote this when i first told her i was in love with her and gave her this poem with a single rose on our first month anniversary. it has no name, but more meaning then anything i've ever written.

    when i see the way you look at me
    i fall for you again
    cause in your eyes all i see
    is a love with no end
    -
    sometimes my heart is restless
    and i know not what to do
    i tell myself each breath taken is more precious
    when i'm right here next to you
    -
    cant explain a thing about how you make me act
    these words cant justify how i feel
    pinch myself just to clinch the fact
    that this dream i have is real
    -
    each time i hold your body close to mine
    when we're underneath the sheets
    little did you know, but to your suprise
    when you feel my heart, it skips a beat
    -
    every moment we're apart
    i know i'll never be alone
    bc your always in my heart
    and i will never let that go.

    please if you reply to this thread, take the time to read thru this poem, while typing it out i started to cry, this shit is just too much. but i thought i'd share so you could see how much i loved her. and i guess truthfully, i really havent let go, just like the poem states. peace.
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    "He Who Makes a Beast Out of Himself, Gets Rid of the Pain of Being a Man."
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  • #2
    Corey, you write so beautifully and your feelings really come across as sincere and heartfelt. Thank you for showing your heart, I know it must have been really hard posting this up. Perhaps you are starting to move on, you are able to share your experience and acceptance.

    In addition, after reading this again you made me realize how wonderful and overwhelming it is to be in love. Thank you for putting into words how special and fragile it really is. Something I'll never take for granted again.

    ~ Kisses ~
    Last edited by Amarett; 02-19-2004, 01:42 AM.
    "Deep into that darkness peering, long I stood there, wondering, fearing, doubting, dreaming dreams no mortal ever dared to dream before." - Poe

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    • #3
      hmm, very expressive. Really captures the way love makes people feel and act.
      It's obvious that you truly did put your heart into this, which makes it all the more meaningful and in a way captivating.

      3rd piece of work I've seen from you, nice!
      Keep 'em coming!

      *The Brave today btw*
      :D
      ... it's no surprise, that I got lost in your brown eyes ...

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      • #4
        An excellent poem, you can really see how the poem is expressing love. Brilliant.

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        • #5
          thanks you guys. i guess in a way i'm looking for closure towards the entire situation. i closed up the box that contains all of our things for good.

          the most expressive part in this poem that i cried when i wrote and she cried when she read was the center 2 stanzas.

          sometimes my heart is restless
          and i know not what to do
          i tell myself each breath taken is more precious
          when i'm right here next to you
          -
          cant explain a thing about how you make me act
          these words cant justify how i feel
          pinch myself just to clinch the fact
          that this dream i have is real


          that part describes just a small part of how i felt when i was with her. every moment of being with her. but as the poem states, these words cant justified how i felt. i appreciate all the kind words, hopefully more people can enjoy this.
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          "He Who Makes a Beast Out of Himself, Gets Rid of the Pain of Being a Man."
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          • #6
            I agree with the other guys, you have amazin talent. if your girl couldn't see that then maybe your better off not being with her.

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            • #7
              This is really something so sweet Corey.It really is. And my words now, can't describe how this poem is beautifull and deep. I'm really amazed. If someone would write something like this to me I would be really proud and honored. It's really amazing.

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              • #8
                thats very kind of you
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                "He Who Makes a Beast Out of Himself, Gets Rid of the Pain of Being a Man."
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                • #9
                  corey...that was real good. i can feel your emotion when reading it

                  i especially like the last stanza

                  every moment we're apart
                  i know i'll never be alone
                  bc your always in my heart
                  and i will never let that go.


                  because that's very imprtant in a relationship to still be true when your apart
                  reminds me of a line i wrote in something where i wrote
                  "i need someone to love me when we're together but even more when we're apart"

                  it wasn't a poem though


                  great work corey, the fact that it still touches you now shows it was straight from the heart
                  Mystery
                  Another Fallen Soldier
                  ~Rest In Piece Marvin, Mark, Leona, Proof & Kasey J~

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                  • #10
                    thanks mystery. i wish it didnt touch me anymore, bc everytime i read it or think of it, i'm takin back to that time. i dont think i will ever fully recover from her.
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                    "He Who Makes a Beast Out of Himself, Gets Rid of the Pain of Being a Man."
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                    • #11
                      First piece i've seen from you. Impressive, though i dont hold a rep with many posts yet, you can still weigh my opinion as heavy as anyones. its inspiring, way to pour your heart onto paper man. awesome
                      Impress me First

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                      • #12
                        yeah, fuck, that last post from skills was actually me, shit
                        still nonetheless my opinion sticks... talent my friend talent

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                        • #13
                          Originally posted by something
                          yeah, fuck, that last post from skills was actually me, shit
                          still nonetheless my opinion sticks... talent my friend talent
                          hey man, its cool, whether you have 6000 posts or 3.. i'm still gonna take ur opinion to mind. but thanks a lot for the comments, i appreciate them all.
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                          "He Who Makes a Beast Out of Himself, Gets Rid of the Pain of Being a Man."
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                          • #14
                            sometimes my heart is restless
                            and i know not what to do
                            i tell myself each breath taken is more precious
                            when i'm right here next to you


                            I probably missed it when you first posted this... wow.. strong words, many feelings and i really like the 2nd part. well done .

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                            • #15
                              thank you for the feedback. thats my favorite part of it too.
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                              "He Who Makes a Beast Out of Himself, Gets Rid of the Pain of Being a Man."
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