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    im in this mess alone and unwilling,
    scared and torn and dead - unborn,
    take my body and throw it to the sky,
    cuz thats the way i always lived, goodbye,
    at long last my dreams are true,
    everything is gone to me but you, and i cant see anymore,
    nothing is clear but the blood scattered on my floor,
    it flows around my body like a balnket, and i sleep,
    unstirred and left to rot,
    for two days ive been here alone and unwilling,
    to face this alone - but to drag you with me is a fate i ignore,
    i pace in my mind why you shot me in metaphor,
    your reject and neglect is why im dead on the floor.

  • #2
    you really have a talent there. i hope that by writing that, you got some aggression out. when i write things as detailed and dark as this, i am usually trying to just vent some emotions. but you write excellently, everything is well rhymed and accompanies the next line. awesome, awesome work.
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    "He Who Makes a Beast Out of Himself, Gets Rid of the Pain of Being a Man."
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    • #3
      Thanks for the input, it provokes ambition and motivates me to further pursue this.

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      • #4
        This was really deep poem with strong words. My type of poem! I like it.You got talent that is for sure.

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