first time poem

[Soldier_]

When iam hurt I aint bruce or touched/
Its like my prayers to god aint doin nothin but makin my life rushed/


my heart i clutch, cuz im in so much pain/
when it rains i cry, when it snows i snort cocain/

when its hot i blaze, watebver to slow the days/
cuz all i got is my (nine) and i'll still die if some one fucks with the hood today/

so i pray silently, violently is all my eyes-can-see/
watchin younger kids act like thugs, or atleast try-to-be/

i'd never ask someone to-cry-for-me, cuz the rivers and lakes are made from my mistakes/
and my mistakes are tears n fears, but to change is too late/

so i demonstrate how to act right, instead im teaching hate/
preachings states the wrong impression,depression, its nothin great/

the reaper doesnt await, his ass is commin for-me/
my sorrows drain from my-pee, cuz i washed em out with forty’s/

so god put me on probation which he should be haten/
cuz im impatient and is more likely to make me a hos-pit-al patient/

give some feed back.................

[elemental]

i like it. but its so real its scary.

[Soldier_]

aight farmer tanx for the feed back i apreciated uppin for more Feed Back!!!!!!!!!!!!

[WHITEnight]

it was okay