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    I take it that no one liked my last poem I listed, but oh well. I like this poem because it describes me indirectly. And before any one says anything, NO I DONT NEED PSYCHIATRIC HELP. Thank You. Please leave any replies other tham those stating that I should get help.

    If the world knew what goes on inside my head
    If the world knew how I’ve really been
    If the world knew how I really felt
    If the world knew how often I need help
    If the world knew the answers that I have sought
    If the world knew the reasons I never talk
    If the world knew how many friends I have made
    If the world knew how many of those people I actually hate
    But if they saw what lies underneath this mask
    I don’t think that I would ever last

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    If that means you need psychiatric help.. I guess I should reconsider the idea and go back to therapy again... lol.

    But, that was pretty cool. *thumbs up*
    Now let the night be dark for all of me.
    Let the night be too dark for me to see
    Into the future. Let what will be, be.'

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    • #3
      thanks. I only added the "psychiatric help" part because ppl read my writings and when they read that one they always think that i need help b/c its sad and depressing and stuff. but as the title says, if the world onlt knew...

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      • #4
        thanks. I only added the "psychiatric help" part because ppl read my writings and when they read that one they always think that i need help b/c its sad and depressing and stuff. but as the title says, if the world onlt knew...

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        • #5
          I liked it. It's really short, and I'm more a fan of longer poems, but good work. Sorda describes how I feel... *sorda*.
          ...
          I feast upon the weak, so speek beef - I'll shoot you n scream "Increase the peace!" - Kuniva
          ...

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          • #6
            thanks. i'm glafd you liked it. i apologize for the length.
            Originally posted by Ex Limit
            It's really short, and I'm more a fan of longer poems
            I just cant write long poems without them sounding whack. so well thanks for the reply.

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            • #7
              it's effective.....and has the potential to played with in many ways.

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